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Brand New

05 Oct

You stand there tellin’ me what I should do
as if you know who I is
blind to all the things I’ve been through
seen things that yo’ eyes are blind to
crunched down conflicts yo’ mouth can’t chew.


I done moved on long ago, while you stood still glued to yo’ livin’ room.
Ma’ home ain’t that republic on ma’ passport front; No! It’s a mental dome foreign grown & can’t be cloned.
That lil’ fella’ you knew back in high school, he’s gone!

This product here is mentally brand new
consciously re-packed, spiritually re-done
I ain’t no tiny naive mole hill
recognize this here is a Sahara sand dune
& you no longer know me
so please approach me slowly.

uThanDiLe(c)2012

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8 Comments

Posted by on October 5, 2012 in Uncategorized

 

8 responses to “Brand New

  1. brian miller

    October 5, 2012 at 10:51 am

    ha….love the attitude with which you write this…the strength showing change from before….that last stanza is cool with self definition…and the last line is a winner….as it opens the door anew with the invitation…

     
  2. ManicDdaily

    October 5, 2012 at 2:47 pm

    Yes – very strong defense here! From mole hill to Sahara sand dune – forbidding. k.

     
    • frikalture

      October 8, 2012 at 12:55 pm

      twas tha coolest symbolism I cud find to reflect a huge change….

       
  3. Claudia Schönfeld

    October 5, 2012 at 4:54 pm

    oh i like…we tend to see people the way we met them once and often are unaware of the change and the things they went through…ha…good that you told them…strong voice in this..

     
    • frikalture

      October 8, 2012 at 12:52 pm

      true that…sometimes tis difficult to accept that someone has changed in ways you could not have imagined possible.

       
  4. Anna Montgomery

    October 5, 2012 at 7:12 pm

    Here Brian beat me to a lot of what I’d say :). I’ll add that I also think you achieve a marvelous level of characterization and the sense that the reader is being addressed directly. Much enjoyed, a tight right that exploded off the page!

     
  5. frikalture

    October 8, 2012 at 7:55 am

    thank y’all for all tha cool comments. much appreciated and very constructive.

    1luv

     
  6. butimbeautiful

    October 13, 2012 at 11:00 pm

    Really great poem – very quotable! I love the ‘so there’ feeling.

     

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